Tuesday, 12 May 2015

Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.
A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. Then he hears his captan on the mic the captain says your mission is to find a bomb in the city before it blows the whole city up.

The spaceman needs to find a portal. Suddenly he saw a portal the portal was called milky way he stepped into the portal he was spinning and turlling and finally he was in the city.

When he got into the city he had to do his mission and he saw strange people and strange pets. Then all of a sudden he heard beeping it was the bomb the bomb was on 30 seconds and he was listening to where the beeping was coming from. It was coming from inside the house

Then he went into the house and found the bomb and he took it out and threw it away and saved the whole city the people were so happy that they said thank you for  saving them and his captain said well done.


  1. Nice writing Nyree keep the good work up. :)

    From Teija

  2. wow cool story you are the best writer not like me

  3. Hi Nyee your a great writer.keep up the good work